Short Story, first 4 paragraphs. What do you think?

the first sentence is what i luv the most. it leaves me begging for answers. then u smoothly tie ur main character in the environment. i luv it. then u get more detailed which is nice. i think this has great potiental and u shood keep writing. oviously it needs to be proof read but that doesnt matter. remember as u write though to mantain your style. u had me sucked in the first sentence and then it was a little dry, but the last sentence had me wanting more. if u keep it up, u may have a serious career ahead of u if ur not already published. if u write more please send it to me! id love to read it :) my email: heretohelpyou1516@yahoo.com