Short Story, first 4 paragraphs. What do you think? world!?

You use a lot of direct characterization, saying 'hey, Jason's smart', 'Jason's poor', while it might be smart to let some of these facts develop on their own. E.g. instead of saying Jason is poor, talk about how 'he held the money in his hands, hoping it would be enough to pay for this months bills' or 'he hoped that the little money left in his pocket would be enough to buy a new bed for his sister that way she didn't have to sleep on the couch anymore.' I love the descriptive prose in the first paragraph, but I don't like how you piled it on, then didn't let a sliver of descriptive prose seep into the rest of the few paragraphs. Try to spread it around (like peanut butter on a slice of bread). I wish I could be a writer...